麻烦英语好朋友 帮我看看我的文章 改改错 这是一封求职信March 26th,2011Dear Mr.Li:I know that your university have a open position in English teacher from my friend Mr.Zhang.I would be interested in exploring the possibility of

麻烦英语好朋友 帮我看看我的文章 改改错 这是一封求职信
March 26th,2011
Dear Mr.Li:
I know that your university have a open position in English teacher from my friend Mr.Zhang.I would be interested in exploring the possibility of ovtaining such a position within your University.I have been a doctor degree of California University of Languages.My major is arts.Especially,I'm good at English,and,I'm interested in teaching english.I want to be a english teacher as i was a child.I can teach something in english about oral ,reading,writting,arts.
I look forward to meeting you soon in an interview.Please contect with me at 1234567.I have taken are contained in the enclosed resume.
sincerely yours
Maria Stein

I know(have heard) that your university have(has) a(an) open position in English teacher from my friend Mr.Zhang.I would be interested in exploring the possibility of ovtaining such a position within your University.I have been(got) a doctor degree of California University of Languages.My major is(was) arts.Especially,I'm good at English,and,I'm interested in teaching english.I want(wanted) to be a(an) english teacher as(since) i was a child.I can teach something in english about oral,reading,writting(writing),(and) arts.
I look forward to meeting you soon in an interview.Please contect(contact) with me at 1234567 .(I have taken are contained in the enclosed resume.)
最后一句话没看懂,如果是附件是我的简历,建议说成：
Please kindly read my resume enclosed.
以上括号里改的都是很基本的拼写及语法时态错误.
说实话,如果是很正式的求职信,尤其你求职的职位还是大学里的英语老师.信里的英文表述能力让我忍不住为楼主担心啊……

日期 是写在右上方的。。。还有i know...要空格的。。。。have变has a an 很多短语等等。。。。。
重新写吧。。。。或者搜一篇范文。。。。

from my friend Mr.Zhang？？？
an English teacher when I was a child

时间应该写在右上角
称呼后用逗号
应该把have a open position in改成have an open position for
I am interested in。。。of obtaining。。。your university
have a doctor's degree
teaching English（大小写）
an Engl...

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时间应该写在右上角
称呼后用逗号
应该把have a open position in改成have an open position for
I am interested in。。。of obtaining。。。your university
have a doctor's degree
teaching English（大小写）
an English teacher since I。。。
。。。about speaking。。。and arts
I am looking。。。
contact
Attached is the enclosed resume.
Sincerely

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